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Professor Patrick L. Courts
Department of English
State University College of New York at Fredonia



This is a timed essay (45 min.): Topic--Discuss an invention that can be both troublesome and helpful in society. The writer's first language is Spanish (from Puerto Rico) but she has been in this area for several years and is a relatively fluent speaker of English.

  In Our society today, we use many inventions. Some of these inventions are helpful and some of them just seem to make life more troublesome.

In this case cars are not troublesome. These days cars can transport you almost anywhere. And when it's snowing cars can protect you from the snow. Or when it's you won't get poored on it's good for sheltering. Some people got cars for other purposse. Like popularity and a hire self-esteem.

I for one love cars because you wont have to walk every where you are going, but I like walking. You can travel almost everywhere in the world. Today because of high technology today. Suppose your best friend decide to move across town which is a driving distance you can drive there.

If it is snowing the car can protect you from the snow. So that you won't get slow down buy the snow and arrive to where you are going late. On top of the get frost bites. When it's raining the car is a good shelter you wont get poored on soaked and wet. Cars can protect you almost from anything. That is why people like different cars to suit their taste.

Some people buy cars for wrong reasons example popularity. When your not popular and you buy and expensive care like a convertible. Everyone want to be see in your car so you now have friends and be in with the crowd. To be down with some people you would do thing you never though you have done.

To drive is a good way to clear your mind. Cars is a helpful invention these days. Technology is getting advance everyday. Some inventions save live and some are disasters and mess up people lives. The one's that are helpful are suitable for people. And the one that are not suitable are disliked buy everyone.

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