How loose is too loose?

Let’s take a look at these different versions of Emily Dickinson poems to see what impact the changes in punctuation, capitalization, and diction do to the meaning of the poems.

The Soul Selects Her Own Society


Edited Version

The soul selects her own society,
Then shuts the door;
On her divine majority
Obtrude no more.
 
Unmoved, she notes the chariots pausing
At her low gate;
Unmoved, an emperor is kneeling
Upon her mat.
 
I’ve known her from an ample nation
Choose one;
Then close the valves of her attention
Like stone.
Dickinson’s Version

The Soul selects her own Society—  
Then—shuts the Door—
To her divine Majority—
Present no more—
 
Unmoved—she notes the Chariots—pausing–
At her low Gate—
Unmoved—an Emperor be kneeling
Upon her Mat—
 
I’ve known her—from an ample nation—
Choose One—
Then—close the Valves of her attention—
Like Stone—

I Never Saw a Moor

Edited Version

I never saw a moor,
     I never saw the sea;
Yet know I how the heather looks,
     And what a wave must be.
 
I never spoke with God,
     Nor visited in heaven;
Yet certain am I of the spot
     As if the chart were given
Dickinson’s Version

I never saw a Moor—
I never saw the Sea—
Yet know I how the Heather looks
And what a Billow be.
 
I never spoke with God
Nor visited in Heaven—
Yet certain am I of the spot
As if the Checks1 were given—
 
1Tickets purchased for a train trip